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Title Mere Enchantment
Author Alicia Rivoli
Genre Young Adult, Fantasy
Publisher CreateSpace
Publication Date April 12, 2012
How I Got This Book From the Author
Paperback 392 pages
Stand alone or series Book #1 in series
My Average .2 pages a day... that's bad.
Reading Difficulty 2
(on a scale of 1-5 5 = dictionary vernacular)
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| Mere Train-wreck | |
When a newly formed group of teens takes shelter
from a freak storm, they soon discover there’s more to their vacation spot, and
their own lives then they ever realized. To escape the scary weather, the five
friends find them selves separated in an unknown world, a world they were all borne in. Now, they must learn years of untaught magic and combat if they want to
defeat this new world’s dark threat.
Hit The Mark:
*Great story/idea. This novel has an intriguing plot, but it really needed to be developed more and come to more of a conclusion, even if the author is planing on writing more, there needs to be some resolve.
*Intriguing world development. The world development might be the best thing this novel has going for it. I was really intrigued with the world and the strange new creatures. I wanted more.
*Interesting characters, though I would love them developed more.
*Intriguing world development. The world development might be the best thing this novel has going for it. I was really intrigued with the world and the strange new creatures. I wanted more.
*Interesting characters, though I would love them developed more.
Needs Improvement:
*Long-Winded (especially in the first few chapters) The first couple of chapters could have been condensed into a single chapter. Use an editing eye. Step back and think, does the reader really need to know each food that goes into your characters mouth? Do we need to know when the secondary characters are cleaning the house or packing all sorts of foods into a picnic basket?
*Telling, not showing. This seems to be a common issue with many novels. The author gets caught up in the direction of the novel, and ends up telling the reader the story. Instead, they should develop vivid scenery, unique characters and delectable dialect - all of which will lead the reader through your story.
*Unrealistic dialogue. Contraction, contraction, contraction. When you read a novel, YA especially, you realize that people don't talk like that. People use contractions when talking.
*More character names than possible to keep up with. The tertiary characters didn't need names.
*Conflict easily resolved. What makes books interesting are not the crazy character names or unique animals, it's the conflict. There was a lack of conflict throughout the novel, and the conflict that it did have was all resolved entirely too easily. Like playing a board game with your little brother who makes up rules to his advantage. You've gotta break a sweat to get their attention.
*WTF happened to the ending? It just abruptly ended, nothing was resolved. Chloe doesn't finish the maze. The 4 main characters never met back up. Preston's bride was never truly revealed. The main antagonist was never even confronted. It's as if someone tore out of the last three or four chapters of my e-book.
*Long-Winded (especially in the first few chapters) The first couple of chapters could have been condensed into a single chapter. Use an editing eye. Step back and think, does the reader really need to know each food that goes into your characters mouth? Do we need to know when the secondary characters are cleaning the house or packing all sorts of foods into a picnic basket?
*Telling, not showing. This seems to be a common issue with many novels. The author gets caught up in the direction of the novel, and ends up telling the reader the story. Instead, they should develop vivid scenery, unique characters and delectable dialect - all of which will lead the reader through your story.
*Unrealistic dialogue. Contraction, contraction, contraction. When you read a novel, YA especially, you realize that people don't talk like that. People use contractions when talking.
*More character names than possible to keep up with. The tertiary characters didn't need names.
*Conflict easily resolved. What makes books interesting are not the crazy character names or unique animals, it's the conflict. There was a lack of conflict throughout the novel, and the conflict that it did have was all resolved entirely too easily. Like playing a board game with your little brother who makes up rules to his advantage. You've gotta break a sweat to get their attention.
*WTF happened to the ending? It just abruptly ended, nothing was resolved. Chloe doesn't finish the maze. The 4 main characters never met back up. Preston's bride was never truly revealed. The main antagonist was never even confronted. It's as if someone tore out of the last three or four chapters of my e-book.
Rating: D
If you like Castle in the Sky, The Eye of the World, Scourge of the Betrayer & The Golden Compass, you might like this novel.
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